Wow! I really enjoyed reading this excerpt. I can relate to the feelings that Liz had once she realized that she has lost the love of her life Mike. Great work and because of this, I would like to bring to your attention the small mistake noted in this sentence. As she was sitting there {in} her sofa. I believe you meant {on} her sofa. I look forward to reading it again with the change made.
LOVE IT !
Keep up the good work.

That was so insanely sad...

): This was quite sad, but a smooth, easy read. You seem to write really well, I noticed very few grammatical errors (one I noticed that recurred was the use of "each others" instead of "each other").

However, while the story wasn't bad, it seemed to be lacking. It's easy to see how much Liz loved Mike, but the reader doesn't get much of an idea about him, what he's like, how close they are exactly.

Maybe to make the story deeper and more saddening you should add a piece to the beginning in which they are together, to show how close they really were. But that's just a suggestion.

Not bad! Keep up the good work (:
Katie