I like this, the descriptions are really nice. I especially like the personification of the clouds, that was really great. I also like the ending, nicely done.

I found this one a tiny bit difficult to follow, but I very much enjoyed your imagery, especially the descriptions of the clouds - I've never heard anything like that before. Keep writing!

I have to say, this poem caught my interest because it seemed so personal. It was like it captured a particular instant, on both the physical level and on a fantasy level. The last line was perfect. Nice work.

Wow. I love this.

-AV