Short, but intriguing.

Good job, but it is a bit choppy at times.

aw :( he was kinda off but still... i liked him... anyways i love your story and i hope you post more soon!

Good job with everything, details plot progression, good closing point.

aw... its so good i got so excited when i noticed a new chapter! please keep writing :D

wow. i wonder what's going to happen next. ~stats crying~ i wish there was more.

Good detail and great transition/rhythm! I really am excited for more to come

i like this chapter. i am glad Ian is back.

A little anti-climatic but interesting.

what happened to Dayna? i hope she's ok. keep updating this story is really cool.

Wow. Great chapter. Nice cliffhanger.

I got your reference. As always, intriguing. The plot is unique, which is something I can definitely admire.

i like it... please update and some constructive critism is that there needs to be a better feel of time like when she has school and like what days she has off becuase in normal vamp. stories a lot of things happen in the early sunrise of days so yeah just a comment... so far though i like the way you write and how vivid everything sounds.

I like that the plot is progressing.

yaya! keep it up!