your summary is wonderful, and a mouthful. It was like a beautiful tongue twister! You have enchanting words and a true meaning behind your words. Good job and good lick with your writing.

This was very good. The last line was beautifully done, kinda like that cheesy, yet none the less effective ending. The word-choice is quite good, though I don't think the word 'coming' really fits well in this. Also, the format is a bit off... for instance, I would put a full-stop at the end of the first line and I suppose a colon at the end of the second... though that's just my opinion.

Anyways, keep up the good work.

- Silence, courtesy of The Roadhouse (link in my profile).