I think it flowed really well. Plus awesome choice of verbs.

I thought it was good! I think that you used strong adjectives and verbs! You have a really good topic and if you made it longer, you would really have something amazing, I think!

I really like it. Personally (and you don't have to do it, because it's fine the way it is) I would change the last line to: "as each wave crashes within me." But what you have there is fine. ] Peace.

A little short, but otherwise it was good.

Dessi