I thought it was kind of sad. Not in a bad way, though. The kind of sad from looking back at a time in your (or rather my life) when that kind of crush happened. But it was sweet too, as those moments can be.

I also liked your other work, especially the oneshot about the line from A Knight's Tale. (One of my favorite movies by the way) Just wanted to let you know that I liked your work and hope to see more of it.

I LOVE Paramore! What an amazing song, and the oneshot was amazing, as well. Oh, that feeling of hope, followed quickly by the sinking feeling as you know you're not going to be acknowledged this time... I really liked this piece, especially the line "her stomach danced not unpleasantly". Great work! :)

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You captured the very essence of sadness here.

Not too shabby :)

Oh my goodness, I can totally relate I've left this way for three years now, I know it's pathetic but its not my fault. I love this, I wish it wasn't a one shot really grabbed my attention

I really enjoyed this because I can relate; they don't know you exist, but they'll all that exist to you. It was short and to the point and you packed alot of feeling and emotion into such a small piece. I loved the bittersweet atmosphere to it. Nice Job, keep it up, and God bless D

This was exceedingly well-written. It takes a lot to capture the feeling in a few short paragraphs and you've done that well here :)

Oh my, I can completely relate to this . . . I have actual done something akin to this. And that sounded pathetic. But this is really good and you do a great job at evoking the longing of the girl! Superb job!

Cassandra

I really feel for her. I know many people might say that, it's just normal high school crushes, etc.

However, knowing the general feeling and actually getting into a person's mind who feels that way are two very different worlds. Most stories written in third person don't delve into the thoughts of that person and it sometimes doesn't work out well the way those who really take down how a person feels while he/she is doing what he/she does. It makes you understand that person, and helps you empathize.

Congratulations on such a touching piece of work.

That was pretty depressing.

Okay wow...This is pretty much EXACTLY me in 7th grade. Okay fine, and still a little now.

Even though this was short, it was incredibley powerful and to the point and you expressed the emotions of the character very well too.

Wow.

This was fantastic.

It was tinged with melancholy which was such a contrast to her optimism that maybe he might actually speak to her. Every single thing she did, trying not look as he passed, holding her breath, etc. is something that everyone does whenever they're trying to be subtle around the person who they like. In my optimistic heart, I wish he did stop to speak to her.

Great job.

I can really identify with the girl, for she is just another anonymous face in her school. I feel quite sad that the boy will never understand her affection for him.

((Recently, I kept staring at a schoolmate until I finally got a smile. Argh, I felt pathetic.))

Wow! I could really relate this to the song!

The character is incredibly easy to emphasise with despite the fact that you wrote in third person. Usually I have trouble really connecting with a character if the text isn't in first person, but as I believe someone already pointed out, we've all been in this situation at least once in our pathetically romantic teen lives.

Left me with a sense of sympathy and pensive thought. Thanks!

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Oh wow. Powerful like I just got punched in the stomach.

lovely piece! I enjoyed the way you show us her crush for him. The part where he actually walks past her is quite well done; we feel this moment with her, because we're all quite familiar with it.

[Her usual routine; her usual dance.]

loved this line! it creates the visual. and of course, the last line is killer. we've all been there before.

The only thing I would say is that the quote doesn't add much to the piece and that the piece itself didn't leave me with lasting emotions... in other words, I might not remember it in a few weeks.

it was still a good piece, however. something of a study.