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Hallway Lurker
grapeseed
2008-08-13 . chapter 1
The name "Amethyst" sounds like an elf princess or a Femminazi heroine from a Disney movie. The prose is a little flowery too.
Otherwise, I think you're a pretty good writer. Keep at it.
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