Woah...I mean...woah. I'm a little scared! Damn I love horror, but you've really outdone yourself here. I hope there's more gore to come :D Yay, gore! Good luck on your finals!
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Disturbing, but I like it. It's actually quite believable, seeing as a lot of serial killers are the family man no one suspects. I like this story, please continue with updates.

This is a pretty disturbing chapter- I think I like it!

There are only a few typoes I'd look for, but otherwse it's really awesome. The chocolate kind of reminded me of Mello from Death Note, though.

Please update soon!

-Stardust.

This is a very interesting concept and I like this first entry. When I first caught the summary of this story, I was somewhat mixed as I wasn't sure how you were going to go about writing it. However, it seems as though you've taken a good route.

I especially like how you're portayel the narrator as a rather normal yet contrasting human being. His love for sweet and his daughter lies in deep contrast to his killer instincts. I like how he goes about talking about his killing ways with the same air of casualty as he talks about chocolate and Beatrice.

I look forward to reading more of this story as well as looking at your other works as you seem like my kind of author, at least from looking at your profile. Good luck writing this and update soon, I look forward to the next installment.