Sounds ok, too early to tell.

The vampire part, of course, interested me. I'm a sucker for vampire fics. They ** rock. Also, the fact that you used my name for your main character's best friend was a pull as well. I liked the beginning. It had nice flow. I'm not sure if you meant to or not, but toward the end your paragraphs became too condensed and I had to strain my eyes to read. This is a definite turn-off to readers.
(Side note: You're a Twilighter aren't you? :D)
Anyway, keep up the good work.

Good start! Looking forward to more.