By the title I wasn't sure if I'd like it, but its great. Difficult with some unique phrases.

I liked this! I could almost see a painting done with colored oil, but it was very blurred. If only had put what the name of the art was so I could see it.

~Rébecca

I loved HB, honestly. It was always so bold. There is so much imagery in this! I'm twisting my head around in circles to see it all!

Two parts I just didn't like the phrasing of:
-"mismatched shoes and bricks with string/are a girl who inhales my wrist."... I know its plural and it should be are but it sounded awkward plus personifying them like that just sounded odd to me.

-"She has dark pupils from thinking it once."... I guess you mean once as in one time, but it sounded like once as in in the past to me. Plus I wasn't sure what the it was referring to.

A question... what is a 2B pencil?? lol. Anyhow I liked it. I really liked the random alliteration in it and the contradictions throughout it. I also like how you connected each stanza with artish things (ink, paintbrushing, design) that worked really well. Though I'm not sure what paintbrushing is, I've never heard of that word before. And I liked how the ending didn't start with the whole art thing, it more just concluded the piece. Really nice job.

Flow:The flow with this piece was just so ON. I read this out loud and it just sounded so beautiful. The only thing I would say though is that the ending just cut off the flow completely. It was so abrupt. I think you should've continued for a little while longer.

Technical Aspects: The fact that you broke these up into stanzas made this piece look good and it was easy to read. Also, I like the way you broke up the sentences into two or three verses.

Stanzas: The stanza's were organized very nicely but I think with the way the flow was going you could have just made them into two separate verses. That would've been just as good.

Descriptions/images: This is one aspect I absolutely adore about this piece. You bring so much imagery with your words. I had a whole picture in my head for every single sentence. Nothing was too cheesy or unreal. Very well done on this part.

Word choice: The word choice for this was exactly what it needed. I noticed that you used mostly common words but wove them in a way that made them sound complex. I think that's what made this sound so nice. Nothing was too hard to pronounce and you don't really need a vast vocabulary to know what you are talking about.

Enjoyment: I really enjoyed reading it but I think that you should have continued. That would've made me just love this even more.

Poetic Devices: Not rhyming was the way to go. Any sort of rhyme with this type of piece would've been cheesy and cliche.

Subject: I basically got that you were describing a piece of art. And doing it so well too.

Other: I was hooked from the beginning all the way to the end. i think you did a very nice job on this piece but I really wish you had continued. The ending was too abrupt, I felt. Maybe it was supposed to be that way but I think you should've continued. Other than that, great job.