|Reviews for It's Okay|
| Lime-Cat 8/16/08 . chapter 1
Overall, this is a very nice piece with very strong imagery, but I must say the first stanza put me off a little bit because it was clunky. It can be improved, so here's my suggestion to start you off:
"Sit(ting) off in a dark corner of reality(,)"
"Star(ing) into a wall that's blank(-)"
"(She) only has herself to thank." - it was this line that needed the most correction.
I really like this poem because I can sympathize with the girl in this poem and I can feel her pain, but is it self-inflicted pain? I mean, it's obviously not physical pain, but why would she want to isolate herself? This question is just out of my own curiosity and doesn't really have much to do with the critiquing of your poem.
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| withluvcherri 8/14/08 . chapter 1
Woahh...chills! That was an amazing poem. You have quite the talent. Keep writing!