you should add another chapter to tidy it up. don't leave it hanging!

I liked it but I am slightly confused and think another chapter would straighten it up an introduce names maybe? I have a hard time concentrating without names but you drew me in.

Beautifully written. :)
Talented indeed.

This is really good! I didn't see any spelling mistakes or anything, so i don't have any criticism to say. So basically all i want to say is i love it and hope you update soon!

Wonderful job. I love the Sailor Moon-esque plot! I really hope you'll give us a sequel or at least his persepective with a happier ending, even though that's not really your thing. Pretty please!:) Thanks for posting!

This is awesome. I would love for you to continue it.