 Jesse the Storyteller 2008-08-16 . chapter 1I'm very confused... The first stanza of this is 100% copied from the New King James version of Psalm 98:1. I looked it up. You do realize that Fictionpress is a place for original fiction and poems, right?
The second two stanzas seem to be your own work. I don't know what you were trying to do with that first stanza.
In the last stanza, I liked the first line - "Let the floods clap their hands." The image of floods clapping hands is original. I like it.
-Jesse
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 intensity 2008-08-16 . chapter 1With the exception of eliminating the article "a" in the second stanza, your second stanza is lovely. Your third stanza is really lovely as well. Theres some repetition in the first stanza I'm not sure how I feel about. repeating "hath" twice and "his" at the beginning of line 3 and 4. I'm not sure in a poem this short you can get away with so much repetition, especially in the same stanza.
I am fond of this poem though. |