HOILY DHIT!

Bwahahaha!

Fucking Fantastical!

*wipes tears from eyes*

Fucking.

Fantastic.

D

I just noticed someone's suggestion on an alternative ending. That would totally make my world go round. _

I loved Cole and Joss together. Pity. If you think about it, she only had sex with Cole once and that's her sex life excluding Jack... She needs to see the world more.. sighs I guess I'll let my imagination take over although the ending was set lol

Wow, seriously, right up until chapter 29 I was rooting for Joss/Cole, I was gutted they wouldn't end up together (yes, about 6 chapters into the story I totally cheated and looked at the reviews to see who she'd be with) but the 29th chapter, right at the end, it totally convinced me that she ended up with the right person... I'm impressed, I mean, usually when I make my mind up about a pairing that's it set in stone.

Anyway, I loved the story, in the beginning it reminded me of this one I started years ago (the whole almost arranged marriage situation where the kids hate each other) but yours pwn'd the hell out of that one and the ending surprised me. Seriously, if you edited it then self published it using createspace or something (they put it on Amazon) then I'd totally buy it-just so I could have my own actual copy I could read anytime-and tell people on my book review blog to buy it.

-Lanna

awesome.

Have you ever thought of doing an alternate ending where Joss ends up with Cole? I think that would make a ton of fans (including me) very happy. :)

I really like your story so far.

But I think I've caught an author slip-

In the beginning, Joss couldn't open any doors to any rooms because the rooms were all locked.

In chapter 5, Cole barges into the bathroom because there was no lock, which Joss found odd. Cole said that his mother removed all the locks in the house.

Joss therefore could have found a guestroom by then.

That's my only critique. But everything else is very interesting :) Many typos, but I'm sure you know that. Try writing your stories in Word first and spell & grammar check everything!

Anyway, good storyline! :)

you don't know what i'm feeling right now.a lot of emotions are exploding inside me.i don't, it feels like i 'm the story,and thank you for making me feel that.

Now,I feel wrong for asking them to get back together.

That just means that his feelings for her when she's seventeen was still the same!

ARGH!WHY ARE YOU TORTURING ME?

Are they really gonna get back together?TELL ME YES PLEASE!I'M BEGGING YOU!

OHMYGOD!I CAN'T STOP CRYING!I know,I'm so patethic...

Why can't she see that Cole is freaking inlove with her?SHE'S SO OBLIVIOUS!