First of all the whole story is really creative! I would have never been able to think up something like that! I don't have any tips because in my opinion everything so far is really great!! Keep writing! I can't wait for the next chapter!! :D

That was interesting for sure, its a bit choppy I think, it needs to be thickened in some places and thinned in others, but its good. :))

How cute...I love how Jamie is so cute, repeatedly apologizing to Nick. ^_^

Interesting idea...I love the thought of a futuristic girl hearing real music for the first time. Can't wait for more!