absolutely lovely. :D
but i've just some ideas?
the plot was really good and it would set the mood if they just have some more scenes not just one. (OMG. is this a one shot or a long story? sorry. :|) hm. and it would be better if you would descrice the scenes more vividly, like how she was irritated by the way Audrey acts or the feelings and emotions that lit up on Nessa's face when the scenes happened.

I think the story would be better in Nessa's perspective and if she would get surprised that Zach called her "Nessa" just when they met, even if you implied that it was love at first sight but still, the bluntness and closeness Zach gave needs more explanation, or why not try another one shot of the same thing but only in Zach's perspective?


Nonetheless, i loved it! :D
more power! JA!
~viciouslybittersweet
~we live for death

aww! that was so cute and sweet. loved it