i love the first stanza - it sets such a great mood for the poem. i especially love the line, "and leave me quivering/ in a pile of sticks it is only/ you who'll stay behind" there's something so romantic about it

i don't like the last bit, though i'm sure you meant for it to be the rawest part of the poem. it doesn't seem to fit with everything else, somehow. i think it may be because the lollipop, to me, has a summer-like feel, whereas the rest of the poem strikes me as an autumn mood. otherwise, i'm still in love with all you write!

konban wa

The summary ("birds get lonely, too, sometimes") compelled me to take a peek inside. I liked what I saw.

Favorite line: "but you are the / only one i'll let warm my / eggs and lick my lollipop"

*chuckles* I really love that line. At first, of course, it brings back the extended metaphor of the birds -- "warm my eggs." Then afterwards, the "and lick my lollipop" reminds me of a little girl letting her "boyfriend" share her lolly. *smiles* Innocence in its purest form.

Hm, I think you've just inspired another haiku for my series. Thank you, my dear.

Ha det
-Shan-

true friendship ;) nothing like that is there?
i like this, simple and beautiful. Nice work.