LOL, I find the starting very cute. Cute lil boy name too, Lipagron. >_<

"Lipagron: Light Beast?! I am here! Show yourself! I've come for my abilities!" (I feel like hugging him...)

I think I just laugh throughout the chapter (AM I supposed to?) The whole exchange of dialogues between the characters is so cute (ok girl calmed down...)

LOL Lipagron is such a lost child...

It's all coming to a close now. I wonder how it will end. As for my story I need to plan a lot more out if I want it to be successful. I can't just name a place anymore, I need to give it purpose and history. I need to give my story's setting history. I also want to build Mairis a little darker so the contrast to her being happier in life is apparent.

Hello my old friend. As you can see I'm back. The first thing I wanted to do was read your story so that's exactly what I did.

First off, this chapter was good. I like Cam's new ability and the fact that he and Cali are partners again. The elders seem troubling to a higher extint than I originally thought, and I see some epic battles in there. It's truly sad about Lipagron but since that was like...twenty chapters ago, I should move on.

Second, how've ya been? lol...well...Merry Christmas and Happy New Year. See ya, much later.

"Excellent chpt". "A master peice". That's how Lipagron survived those many years ago.

Komori almost completed his mission in one strike. (OMG)

And lastly how strong is that guy's attack.

Komori is faster than I thought. He got all of them at the same time.


As soon as Komori walked into the room he immediatly attacked you know who. That had to be the coolest scene I read so far.

And Futton ha ha...

"Tag!" How cool and original. I never would have thought of that. I can't wait to see how this turns out.

After reading another good chpt I once again am left hanging. The plot thickens, "I can't wait until this unfolds".

Kewl! An intro to a new character. He seems kewl so far. I have a guess that Lipagron and his group have to go back to that city. What a stroke of bad luck for them so far. And California as well.

You were right though, you did spice it up a bit. You give a little bit more detail about the characters and their surroundings. Fun chapter!

Wow. Did Komori really have to kill that kid? Maybe he thought he was weak and didn't want him slowing the rest of the group down? At first, when everyone was running around trying to find a group, I though Komori would end up in Lipagron's group. Anyhoo, the Great Quest begins!

I knew I liked that Elder 12 (Illuminus)! It's nice that Lipagron has someone who believes in the Light Beast too. And poor Vibora, guess we won't be seeing him again. Lol!

Take that leader dude! Awesome! Getting closer to the Great Quest. I like the Elder 12, he at least has his head, unlike that leader.

Cool story dude! I usually don't like stories where it reads like a script, but this was really good. When the sheep said that his dad died and he got mauled by the others...it made me cry a little. But when Lipagron accepted him, it really spoke to me about his character.

I'll definitely keep track!

"Another piece of the puzzle falls into place". I didn't expect him to be an elder. Good chpt.

By the way, HAPPY 100...

"I wonder what mysteries will unfold in this story". The best kinds of stories keeps a person guessing, this is one of those stories.

"Rhen" I'm speechless.