alright, here's a review:

this story (as well as the title & summary, actually) gave me chills. i'm dying to find out what happens next. write more, please?

peace,
red.

so i was just re-reading some of the stories in my favorites and i stumbled upon this little number,

please update, im honestly hooked :)

Hm...this is possibly the vaguest story I've read. There's a lot details that I'm missing, and I'm not sure if it's because there's a story before this, or if I'm supposed to connect the dots myself.

But I still find myself intrigued, interested. I feel like I'm being fed scraps here, just little bits of a narrative, instead of a full meal, because the reader (me) isn't being given enough information, description, story really.

It's still...really well written, I don't know, it's a weird thing to say considering I've just knocked you against it. Unconventional characters, I just wish I could see more of a consistant plot going on there. Jackson is really angry, he needs to stop mentioning Holly's lack of parents, it's getting redundant. He's too touchy and bratty. He's perfect.

More character development for Holly, please?

Alright, I'll be faithfully waiting for an update!-RAR

[The second was that he had been waiting for her, too.]

i like that even though there was a lot of space between the two chapters, every little sentence tied me back to the first one. like, like: [She knew that, with this boy, asking questions got her nowhere. It seemed to be another trait he shared with Hunter.] and it reminded me of the no-money-for-law-school thing.

for the next chapter--can i give you a wishlist? oh please--i'd like to learn a little bit more about what's ** Holly up. [can't she talk?! what's the **'s wrong with her?!] and a little more about the Jackson/Kelsey thing. in that awesome way that you have, the one where you write seductively and i have to pay attention to every word or i'll miss it, and it'll be the end of the world.

this is great! i hope you update soon!