My Ruff Draft "daughter" thought this was a real song when she read it over my shoulder... she was highly impressed when I told her otherwise! I always find myself re-reading this one...

"it's the story of our lives isn't it
this push & pull give & take"

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I really like how all the lines seem to mix together which really shows all the conflicting emotions underlying this piece and makes me want to read it fast, in one breath.

This is definitely my favourite line though: "I hold you in my arms as you blink back tears & my heart moves"

Good job on this, it's gorgeous.

wow this was amazing. i really enjoyed reading it and i feel i can relate to it. the only thing i would suggest is maybe putting in some punctuation. keep writing!