Hi there!

I just read this story and I found it really cute. I had a good time reading it.

Hope you'll keep the good work up =)

AranaBanana

Oh yay, I love completed stories! Poor Ethan, his nose is bleeding.

I've been hunting for Good Girl/Bad Boy stories on Fictionpress, and well, I think that Ethan really fits the bill of a Bad Boy. Gosh, I've a classmate named Louise, plus a cousin named Ethan.

oh! how i love this story! :]
It has an awesome beginning
& perfect ending =]
oh! i love the parts where roses are involved
& what Ethan gave her!
I think its rather cute =3
& how he asked her,,on a note
was so cute & heartwarming x]]
I also think that Sotto was overdoing it,
but i love how Ethan handled it =D
& yup =]
i hope u write more awesome stories like this one! =D
keep up the good work!

Awesome! :]
i just read the first chapter
& so far
its pretty funny
& very interesting =]

Wow, that was an excellent conclusion to the story. I loved it.

Sorry for taking so long to review. I never forgot this story though :)

Hope you continue to write, because you really have something going for you here.

~Carm~

I have to admit that it was the synopsis that drew me in. The story (at least to this point) is rather cute and the dialogue snappy, driving the plot.

One thing I would suggest is that you use the word "said" more. It's invisible to the reader. Right now the characters are sighing (LOTS), echoing, whispering, demanding, stating, growling, assuring, (etc)...variety is good, but it's also tiring.

I'll be back to read more.

I loved this story!

I love it! I think you put it together really well, the growth of Ethan and Louise's relationship was wonderful and fit really well.
Looking forward to reading some of your other works :)

I really liked this story! :) It was definitely cute. I think some things could be expanded a bit more. Maybe the little scene where Sotto had kidnapped Louise. Also, somethings were a bit unrealistic, such as the parents hardly calling. And, what? She's house sitting for the rest of her life or what? Like, she moved in there? I was a bit confused on that part. Anyways, it's a great story, but could be a lot better if detailed and expanded more. I love it!

Aww so cute. I liked it! Good job! =D

I love how you ended the story! This is probably one of the best romances on fp in a long time. Great job.

Hey! Let me say that I liked your story a lot, and that it was very well-written. Let me just point out though, that some things in your story (such as Rex re-appearing at the very end of the story and wanting Louise back, and the incident with Sotto and his friends, etc.) I feel, have happened to abruptly or suddenly, or even too quickly if you may, like Ravina has mentioned; as well as the fact that we don't really know much about Louise and her background as such. However, don't ever stop writing, since you have the talent and potential to keep on doing so, and get better at this too. And apart from those points of criticism from me and Ravina, good job! Keep writing! =)

I just wrote a long review which somehow managed to disappear on me. Ack!

Out of pure laziness, I will summarize instead of rewriting everything I wrote previously:

1) I'm surprised you don't have more reviews.
2) You have a good writing style, with proper grammar and spelling. Your idea for this story was also very good.
3) Some parts of the story were unrealistic - such as Louise being a house-sitter at such a young age. Plus you don't mention much about Louise's family; is she over 18 and therefore a legal, independent, adult?
4) I felt like the whole part with Sotto happened too quickly. But I'm glad the conclusion was realistic in that the police were involved instead of Ethan doing some matrix-slash-superhero thing and managing to save the day.
5) I read your last Need 'n' Know and I find it cool how the people walking by are characters from your other stories! Now I'm very tempted to read those stories to get to know those characters! Not obsessive and crazy at all!

I'm sorry if the above seems mean - I was trying to provide constructive criticism because I truly feel you have a talent for writing. I look forward to reading more!

- Rebekah

that was a lovely ending! and the no getting pregnant until shes married was funny.