Finally finished it. Great story, and definitely loved it. But you left me hanging in the end. What happened to Zack Julie Marie Donnie and Michael? Are Sondra and Zack still together? The only thing was a couple spelling errors and that's it. Although I stick with my earlier statement. It'd be a bit more enjoyable and savory if it was made a little longer ^.^
Great write, want to read more. Can't wait for more. You are doing more, right? I know you, you'll do more ^.^
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is it possible to draw out the chapter a bit more? I liked it, but I personally think it'd do better if it was made a little longer. draw out the details a little. It'd help with suspense. But other than that, it's great ^.^
I'm interested =]

The ending definitely works for a sequel. Good job, I liked it reading this.

You did use apartment a lot at the end, though it can be easily fixed.

Other than that, you did a great job with this story and I'm glad you finished it. I'll be looking out for the next one. :)

Velvet.

I don't know why it took me so long to get to this chapter. *confused* Huh. Well, I'm here now!

And I thought Sondra was going to tell her secret. Hmm. The part where Shay and the others were getting killed was confusing at first, what with the lighting on fire part.

Tabitha turning herself into a werewolf was rather interesting, though. A strange twist at the end. Good job with this.

Velvet.

It was really good, and I'm guessing it's like a short story??
I loved it though.
Good Job

~ Alaska

This is really good and interesting.
I'll work on reading the rest soon.

~ Alaska

Nice! The story did seem to move a little fast, so making it longer in order to further develop the plot would certainly do no harm. Still, fun story. It was really exciting. :'D Lindsay's death made me cringe. Serves them right though, huh?

Over all it was pretty good, I think it could be improved but not a bad job, I quite enjoyed reading it.

Good update. Is this whole story going to be centered around one night in the woods or several? Interesting work. I can't wait for the next few chapters. VelvetyCheerio.

Oh, I am very much enjoying the story. The appearence of this sister adds a nice little twist to things. Good update. VelvetyCheerio.

No! Not a cliffie! That part when Zack started biting on Sondra's neck was clever. Very clever. Don't forget those question marks!

Nice spell that Sondra cast. Hope it's enough to get her friends out of danger. Hope it's enough to get her out of danger. Can't wait to meet the new character.

Keep it up, Angie! VelvetyCheerio.

Hehe, frisky, heh. Ahh, that made me smile. The ability to reassemble, that's interesting. I'd like to see that in action. You're doing good. VelvetyCheerio.

Ah, she should have payed more attention to that cellphone! Now Sondra really has a problem on her hands.

One problem. Where are all the question marks?! You have many sentences in here that need them. For instance, "'Still up for that party, Tyler,' asked Michael." You know exactly where to put commas, which is something not a lot of us do, so that's a plus, but don't forget to use the question marks.

Good chapter. VelvetyCheerio.

Hey, hey! Sorry I haven't gotten around to this new story you've put it. The prologue was rather, intriguing, and I must say, it is developing into a well made story.

Tyler is an interesting addition. Onward to the next chapters to see how things work out for Sondra's witch powers and the arrival of more vampires. VelvetyCheerio.

Bah, cell phones aren't good for anything. I once had that happen to me, except it was during a Math exam. Not nearly as dangerous as having it ring in the company of blood-thirsty vampires, but I can still relate. :]

I liked this chapter, even though it was short. You left us with a very cruel cliffhanger. Update soon.