Well, this is a decent story I've found here. Very little, if any mistakes, and an adequate vocabulary. I would say this story is enjoyable, though I have only read the 1st chapter. Though it is your choice, i would like to invite you to my reviews forum. Simply go to my profile page, and click on my forums at the top of the page. It's simply a way to help people get reviews, hopefully you'll exploit it to your heart's content.