oh wow "and in that justify the drip of tears
the drab you have been for all these years"breally ties up the whole poem. the repetition is very nice in this poem, i like it!

When I first skimmed through this I thought it was a natural piece. I guess there is this effect, enhanced by the repetition of "drip drab drub", tears falling through and down. There is a constant beat and fluent flow and very good rhymes.

And of course having read it more closely, I could finally see what some of the phrases meant, "just as welcome not to stay" "the essence of your nothingness" etc. I admire your choice of vocabulary, terse, sufficient and not especially adorned.. Great finishing touch by rewriting the word "drab".

Simply loved it.

~fleur