Hmm... I do not understand the significance of the first line. I like that you didn't capitalize every line in this poem. I'll pretend it's because of my insistence. Hahaha.

I definitely love the contrast and the words you used to show that contrast - between the animal and you. They are great images, very original. I wish I knew what coruscations meant.

My favourite image in this is "their plastic life-stories off the glass of you." because plastic and glass are both valueless and not lasting, but glass has a greater integrity. Plus, it's a literal image in the fact that there is glass in between them and it. :P

Your poems are awesome. I wish I had been reading them all along (*feels like a jerk*). When I have more time I will tackle your stories. :)

-Jesse
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The phrasing of the first two lines confused me a bit. It also seemed odd that the second line ending with a period, but you didn't capitalize the third line, since you did capitalize the fourth.

Interesting piece, the descriptions were really unique. Like "plastic life-stores" and "alive skin." I also like the ending, less abstract than the rest of the piece. Nicely done.

Oh, how gorgeous. I love "blue coruscations, not naked bones." I think it's the whole naked thing. Nudity just appeals to me. And the line after is just guh, too - "While I pace in my alive skin." Wow. So beautiful. Keep writing! :)

Strangely, my favorite part is the summary. For some reason, I can't bring myself to not read anything that specifically claims to not be about dinosaurs. The metaphor is nice, but I find it difficult to read all of it without pausing to wonder at things like "alive skin" instead of living skin. Maybe it's because I don't read that much poetry, but something about the rhythm seems slightly off to me (unless it's just me misunderstanding the rhythm). Final two lines grab me at the end though.

"Blue coruscations, not naked bones." Brilliant line & imagery.
The last to lines were beautifully sorrowful. This was a very unique poem about friendship, and I really enjoyed reading it! :)