This was a very nice read. That Empress was a real jerk. I've gotten a better feel for Madoka.

Also thank you for R&R HoPS. I really appreciate it.

I enjoyed the first chapter. I wish there was more detail to it, but what you had written was good enough. It'd be better if it wasn't so choppy and cut up, but I'm guessing in later chapters that they'll be longer. Good luck with your writing. I'll be waiting for the second chapter.

It's cool to see that you did this. I got a real good understanding of the brother/sister relationship between Ru and Madoka. Once again, you did a good piece of work. I liked this one.

~Deathscythe Outlaw

Keep writing!