This story is very good and it hooked me onto it. I can't wait to see what happens next. Please continue soon!! :-)

Oh no. Poor, poor Cher. Cherry is such a stripper name. Being called Cherry would make me want to hurl. On the plus side, Cale Bennett is a hot, hot name, so I'll be saying that as much as possible in the future. ;)

I like this so far. Yes it is a cliche, but I love them so no complaints here. The characters are sweet, but we're only three chapters in and feel like we're still getting to know them. Cher's character has a clear, sarcastic voice that's easy to identify with. I think sometimes you write more than you need to though, which detracts from the humour. e.g. “No really? Ya think?” I responded, sarcastic." doesn't need the "sarcastic." From the previous chapter- Gwen bit her tongue-not literally of course- doesn't need that clarification... An in the first chapter you slip unnecessarily in between present and past tense.

Im keen to see what Cher's scheme to get Cale back involves. And what Cale is scheming. I'm sensing much scheming happening. Lol. I also like your chapter titles. They make me grin. OK hope to see more soon! :)

Hi,
I liked the chapter. It does add to the intrigue and builds on the sexual tension. Slowly but it does help with the scene. A couple of points for you to consider. Early you use "snorted" for both you and Cale in adjoining sentences. may be worth varying the expressions. You mentioned "Cale, with a spastic level of contortion" some people may find the expression offensive. We can discuss/debate at your leisure. Also "Andersen, snorted silently" Snorted and silent together probably don't work. Glasses giggled probably should be Jiggled.
All minor details but just for your consideration. Good chapter, helps build the story.

Interesting.

Okay. Hooked here. Cliche, of course, but that's how I like em.

I liked your beginning. I'm a sucker for party scenes and you did it rather well!

Haha, so far I think I like Jack the best. He's funny. This part was funny, too:

Just then he got it. (Of course.) “Dude . . .” he drew the word out long and loud before his tone changed immensely. “Purple?” he asked, confused.
It takes my guy friends that long to latch on to differences in appearance, too.

The kiss was a little random. I mean, it came from nowhere, with not a lot of build-up. But I think I might like the character of Emma Hayford. Going to read the next chapter now.

I have a feeling that the advice her brother gave her won't be an easy thing to follow.

Love the story!

:o! Cale is indeed a snake! Now I really want to find out more about this! Update soon, this is neat. And I love that the main character is red head. :P No idea why.