Wonderful story!

"The weather was nice out, not too hot and not too cold; there was a slight breeze but it was not overbearing; clouds filled the sky and filtered the descending sun into beautiful orange, pink, yellow, purple and blue rays as the last sparks of light mixed with the calming dark of night."

Beautiful imagery! The whole concept of David walking home from work was original and good.

Congratulations on yet another wonderful story!

Lavender Quill

Fantastic! I wasn't sure what to expect going into this, but now I'm really glad that I read it. I like how you worked in the Ten Commandments - how you brought to light that even though David thought he had done just a few things wrong, they were actually breaking three commandments. . .

Great resolution at the end. I really liked this.

- Koki

This story is amazing! You have a great talent I loved it! I would reccomend it to anyone.