I liked the story line but this was kind of confusing. I think it was because the names are so similar.

The story could be a lot better if you went more into the spiritual aspect and went more into Julies character. I still liked the story though. Good imagery, except in the beginning it was hard to follow which rooms they were running through.

Wow! You did great! It was amazing, thrilling, and I'm begging for more! You're an awesome writer!

That was an amazing story. It was well written and it had a good story line.

Keep up the good work,
Desi

That was one heck of a heart piercing story. Wow that was powerful.

this was really good. it reminds me of a story im writing myself...
anyways, there were times when you were talking about julie and you kept saying "her father". i think that needs to be cleared up a bit.
but other than that, it was a good short story and i really loved the suspence and the spiritual context. jesus really does give us strength when we need it!
Really good job! i loved it a lot!