|Reviews for He's Hers|
| Wallflower.x 1/16/12 . chapter 37
Please update soon
| Lynn-Night 12/26/09 . chapter 38
| close enough to speak 11/18/09 . chapter 38
Ouch. James was pretty harsh. Luckily Bee is a cold hard bitch so it doesn't matter.
Couple of typos - shuddered, not shuttered. And of course your usual debacle of commas instead of periods at the end of dialogue. Generally much cleaner though... at least in the grammatical sense ;)
Reading this is like meeting an old friend. I hope this means you'll be back for more!
| iluvodie 11/18/09 . chapter 38
way to go james FINALLY kicking her out! lol. cant wait to read more :D
| Lynn-Night 6/1/09 . chapter 37
Wow! That is crazy intense! Please get Polly and James together! They'd be such a cutee couple!
| close enough to speak 5/23/09 . chapter 37
Wo-o-ow James! Smoking! Ridden with typos and rambles and sentence fragments that you should really go back and fix (because clarity in this situation would be dee-lightful, m) but it gets the job done. Yummers!
When I first read this I thought that he said Brittany, which was awkward and funny; but this way is much better, same bad pre-emptive situation but without the cliche. Way to be Polly! and way to be James... "pulled himself above her", m...
| Lynn-Night 5/19/09 . chapter 36
Cute! Good job! Update soon!
| close enough to speak 5/17/09 . chapter 36
Fantastic closing line except that you misspelled the word "be". Your exits tend to be really clever.
I like that Shawn doesn't try to catch the phone. Nice interaction with the 3 of them too, very comfortable and we've-done-this-before.
| close enough to speak 5/16/09 . chapter 35
This was better.
Congrats on Man-U! Way to win big!
| close enough to speak 5/15/09 . chapter 34
Huh. Well... I agree with Shawn and Ryan, but it's kind of a repeat of other James-and-Bee's-fucked-up-relationship moments. Also the grammar in the first two lines is appalling. I guess I just feel that all of this has been said before. Although maybe that's the idea? I do like the last line.
| Kimberlli 5/15/09 . chapter 34
I believe James's a misguided child. But he will find his path.. hopefully )
Ok, so that was my comment for the day!(:
| Lynn-Night 5/15/09 . chapter 34
And don't worry too much about the language...most people that read these stories are teens...and I'm sure they couldn't care less! Haha!
| Lynn-Night 5/12/09 . chapter 33
Love it so far!
| close enough to speak 5/12/09 . chapter 33
Oh m ah. So pleased with everyone! and glad that they've all met and will be able to function as a group. Nice of you to skip the introductions too, that's always awkward or cheesy - likely the latter, since Shawn is never awkward :)
I really really like Allison's car and Shawn, and James holding Poppy's hand, and his flirty but slow-paced explanation. Bravo on him not snogging her senseless or anything, this way feels much more... meaningful, or whatever.
There is a typo in here somewhere but I can't for the life of me find it. There are also lots of misuses of quotations i.e. putting commas at the end of a quote no matter what, even when the next thing is a new sentence. In general though your use of paragraphs is actually fantastic. The pacing of this is really good. Definitely a top 5 chapter!
| Lynn-Night 4/15/09 . chapter 32
Hm good job!
Love it so far!