Awe:) I wish my 'he's the one guy' would write something to me;( it would say Sophie-iloveyou just like that!

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-xGiVeMeMoReMuSiCx

Strangely enough it made me think of Julie Delpy from Before Sunrise/Sunset with the meeting on a train imagery, and then writing a novel about them ten years later. I liked the personal connection I felt with this, not necessarily giving this person away for me to see interiorly, but giving little slices that created mystique and flavor. Keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.

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this is really cute. like, so simple but so lovely. nice work.

Wow...

the first two lines: GORGEOUS.

the third line: IM SPEECHLESS! I envy you!

the train reference, the novel reference,

everything. it's all perfect.

i love the way your poetry about these people never seems too short, or too this, or too that - it's always JUST right. i love every single line of this poem, i really really do!

Oh I like this. I love how you describe the details of her personality in quirky, creative ways. It's amazing. :D (I sound redundant... I love all your poetry -.-')

The form of this poem is great, too, how it seems to taper to the "I love you" and then spread out in the last line. Putting "I love you" on its own line was a good choice. Gave it an emphasis.

-Jesse

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Sweet.

Leaves me wanting so much more, but I love what you had to say. It's a beautiful image.

this made me think of a film that should be made similarly to across the universe in the same type of way

This is a bit more to my liking. “she's the sort of girl you should meet on a train and write a novel about ten years later.” And the ribs line... how zen of you. I do enjoy my thoracic allusions. Write more!

I try not to get too excited when I write reviews and right now I'm trying very hard to not to end all my sentences with multiple explanation points. That's how much I liked this piece.

The idea of "pitching a tent somewhere between my third and fourth rib" is so different and endearing and is one of the most poignant lines that I've read in a poem in a while. I also love the way you used a colour to describe your emotions.

At this rate I just want to say what I loved about each linebut I'll limit myself to saying that I can relate so much with this: "she's the sort of girl you should meet on a train/

and write a novel about ten years later." - I've had moments like that too, way more than I can remember but one that I can't get out of my mind was this time I was waiting for the train and standing a few feet away from me was a girl wearing sky blue converse shoes. All I wanted to do was make her smile and ask her if we could be friends. Your words put a smile on my face and I really did need cheering up right now. Take care.

I loved every word. This poem pitched a tent in my heart :P It's definitely going on my favourite stories list :D

i really like this

especially "she's the sort of girl where

I love you

seems like it needs more words"

that just hit deep, right there

I always read about people like this in poems. It makes me want to meet them, and I never do. I really liked 'when she smiled the world turned orange', and the metaphor in the first few lines.