And it all starts swirling together...very well done. Liked your narrator's voice again.

I enjoyed this chapter immensely. It was so well done, I loved the first paragraph under the first set of stars. Your description of the blood set tone perfectly.
The conflicts are really coming together now, very well done.

Ah, stars now for the break. =)
Very nice, still such a well written piece

It was hard keeping up with the two broken stories, but now as they come together it seems very interesting. I like the detail of the fights, only few grammar errors. I really am intrigued...your italics rightly give something to think about.