Hey just wanted to say i really like this story, i hope you havent completely discontinued it or if you have would consider re contininuing it, i would really like to know what happens and how this story plays out.

anyway thanks

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i really wish you would continue this story.

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Okay, this is really very good.

Colin seems...three-dimensional, which is rare because the typical raped-and-abused kids usually seem very...well, typical. Colin is really interesting. I like him. And I like the animosity between him and Kyle -- it adds so much flavor, and makes me really, really want to keep reading.

There was once instance when you randomly use first person..."I frowned at that"...I think it was somewhere where Kelsie was showing Colin the house.

The diaglogue seems realistic enough...the politeness was exaggerated a bit sometimes but for the most part, it seemed really realistic.

Jake sounds hot.

I know this story has been updated since last year, but I really like it, so I'm still gonna ask: PLEASE UPDATE.

OMG!
This story seems awesome!
I know you haven't updated in a couple of months but still...
Update!!

I really enjoyed this story!! oh i so badly wish tht you would continue it!!^^ Well, i know myself that i am lazy as a writer (i do have stories on though) but i know its hard to update! i do hope tht you will continue the stories, as i love the characters! I can't wait to see how they further develop!:)

I'm really interested in this. :) It kept me entertained during my 3 and a half period class. A period is forty frikin minutes each, so you know I suffered. And this alleviated that suffering a bit. I like Colin; I can't help but pity him. My heart really goes out to him. Kyle is an **. Why would he think an orphan would be stuck up? The kid's never seen a laptop, for god's sake. I hope he cleans up his attitude. *Finger waggle of doom* Claire seems like a nice lady. I like her daughter, too. Not sure about the man, just yet. I really like Jake. He seems really cool.

I hope you get an oppurtunity to update. I mean, I know you're probably busy with your senior year--heck, so am I--but there's time during winter/spring/whatever break, right? *Wink* But then, maybe your teachers are really strict with the homework? Anyway, I'm really enjoying this, and I hope to read more soon. The only thing is that there are a lot of grammatical errors. Maybe you can get a beta? But I like this too much to be too nitpicky. ;)

:] I can't wait to see more.

Up date soon!

OMG, I completely forgot about this story...I was cleaning up my "trash" in my e-mail and found this...somehow deleted it (i'm such a retard) glad i refound it, I'm really enjoying it!

I figured I should drop a quick review, since I put this story on alert >_n love it so far, can't wait for an update!

I'm digging this! Your style of writing makes the characters very easy to digest and you dont overload them with information for the reader to the point where you want to shoot someone. Character interaction here is like something from 'Moste Potent Potions'--you just cant get this stuff anywhere else! (forgive the HP reference).

And to show you that I've been paying attention and to express my grattitude...

The fact of the matter was that adopting older kids meant trying to get them to [except/ACCEPT] you which[,] was a lot harder than getting a five year old to like you.

She wondered how he’d gotten his hair like [THAT], whether or not the Center provided money for haircuts of that sort.

She knew this was going to be difficult[,/‘;’ or ‘.’ possibly] [S]he had known all along but she didn’t care.

They were a bit [damn/Did you mean DAMP?] but Colin paid that little heed.

He was pretty quick on his feet and had even been asked to join the track team but [really he/‘REALLY, HE’ or ‘HE REALLY’] had better things to do. [It looks awkward without the comma if you go with ‘REALLY HE’ but you wont need the comma if you wrote ‘HE REALLY’]

The school grounds were empty [considering/SINCE] it was [a(delete?)] Sunday[,] which Colin considered a lovely thing indeed because it meant no one could see him breaking in. [My reasoning for this is that you use consider in its tenses twice within a few words of each other. It sounds semi-awkward.]

Kevin who was standing closest to him, stepped closer and leaned in, lips pressing onto his ear. ‘Babe[,] where’d you go?’
Of course it ** [Kevin off/OFF KEVIN,] who had immediately started his own revenge scheme and if Colin wasn’t sleeping on the floor of Neal’s bedroom he was in his own bed with hands all over him. [It sounds awkward the way it was, and there was a comma that needed to be added.]

It had gone on long enough[.] [and/(delete?)] [I]f being adopted meant he got to get away from this **, he was taking the opportunity. [A little bit of a run-on—there are three ideas being presented here and it could be shortened to make the tone of the sentence much more decisive and assured.]

great story! the first two chapters were intense and i can't wait for another one!

Orphan fic! This is the soopah difficult clue as to my SECRET IDENTITY.

Kyle, Kylan, I must inquire, why so jerky? I disapprove. Alot.

I am taking you at your word for Jason's straightness at the moment. So for now all I have to say is he's a nice dude. If I was a guy I would appreciate a guy friend who wasn't all 'eww physical affection' (you ever notice how much that sucks for guys? At least with girls people sort of expect you to be affectionate so no one is all whoa there if you are all clingy hug. Less so with the male species. :/)

I am concerned about your theme warnings. I do not wish to see any of these dudes forced to prostitution. Or girls. But with you I suspect dudes particularly as there has been only two girls so far (if you count Claire).

Or wait was it in Colin's past? This is entirely viable as I am reviewing long after reading and have forgotten details. In which case hurrah for happier lives!

i LOVE this story, i love the idea, i love the people in it and i would really really like you to update asap!! :D xox

:D, you liked my review ^^. I can't believe you're going to take on board what I said O__O almost no one really does.

And just before I start, randomly: you like Jonathan Rhys Meyer too, right? He is so ** hot...but onto your story!!

You know your title? Well, by 'chemical bonds' do you mean blood ties? Like the bonds between members of a family who aren't adopted? Meh, well I think you do and I think it's clever because it's focusing upon the subject. Yeah, I like it. But shouldn't 'within' have a capital 'W'?

This review probably won't be as long this time, or as critical because I've said most of what I wanted to say before, and I really just want to read your story and enjoy it.

Hmm, in my experience, even if a guy says he's straight, there are always secret, subversive and pretty damn obvious hints when you hold another guy in your arms and play with his hair xD. But I'll just assume that he's straight in this story xD (Jake). And I really love your style of writing O__O it's gorgeous.

Well I understand Kyle's anger at Colin, and at first I thought he was a total **, but after his interactions with Jake? Ooh, he's borderline.

You really get into character well xD.

There's nothing wrong with the whole 'scene-kid' appearance, and tbh, I expected it, and I'm not exactly disappointed I just...wish he looked different. But that's just me :). However: when you described Kyle, you made the focus become solely on his good points (physically), what about his not so good points? Everyone has a few imperfections, in different ways. Maybe he has a cut on his neck from shaving or something? Or not absolutely perfect skin? He is a teenager after all.
Appearance is one of those things I go overboard about, so don't feel you need to take note of everything I've just said xD.

Eh...you followed it up with Jake too. 'creamy, flawless complexion'? On a teenager? *Sigh* It sounds too fangirlish for me, sorry :(. I don't have a fetish for fugly people or anything xD, I just don't think a character is credible until they have a defect of some kind.

"At that point Jonathon walked in, followed by Kelsie. ‘Jake, how’re you doing my man?’

‘Great sir,’ Jake answered. Colin noticed that he was a happy sort of guy." - I wasn't sure if you were talking about Jonathon or Jake at first :s, but I got it eventually.

I love how you actually described the dinner and went into details about it because it was an excellent opportunity for characterisation, and you took it. Seriously, you did a fantastic job of setting up the domestic feuds going on. Love it.

You won't be able to update soon? D: NO!! I was REALLY GETTING INTO THIS. I'm so sad now. I'll go cry now.

I tend to be quite strong in my criticism with stories that have talent, and I REALLY think that this has talent, and it's going somewhere.

So first off: some of the sentences were worded in a really long-winded and confusing way, and some of them had extra words added in that didn't make sense. I guess it's just a style thing of mine, but I find short sentences make the piece easier to read and they deliver more of a point.

And then there was a contradiction: "Claire didn’t turn to look at Neal. What an odd thing to say. She turned around to look at him and gave him an inquiring look,"

But I loved your use of setting at the beginning and the line about no hope. It made a really strong contrast with Mr. Teal's personality. But, having thought about his suspicious behaviour about Mrs. Rio wanting to adopt Colin (I'm halfway down the chapter) I wonder if Mr. Teal is sexually abusing Colin? He seems to be too reluctant to let him go. Yeah. And then you suggested something with the sentence with "rather fond of" in it.

I like that I'm already guessing what's going on. It's real good.

Can I be really rude? Well, the whole 'something in his eyes' line didn't really work for me at all. In reality, when you try to figure out a person's feelings from looking at their face, you look at the way their eyebrows droop or maybe the bags under their eyes look too deep or something like that. You can look at the eyes all day long, but it doesn't make a difference. I know I've done it somewhere (the whole 'eyes' thing), and if I wasn't so lazy I'd go back and change it. I just wanted to make that point because that line is cliched and it took some of the emotion away when I read it.

I KNEW Neal was abusing him. As much as I love to be right, honey, I think you gave that away just a little too soon. It seems like a fairly pivotal thing, and it's already gone three quarters of the way down the first chapter. The danger of writing in third person omniscient (where you can enter any of the character's minds) is that you give away too much information in one go. You need to pace it out a bit more.

But I liked where you started the story. It's a good beginning.

Yeah. I'm really impressed by this :D. I'll read the next chapter soon, but not right now, 'cause I've got to go :(. But I can't wait ^^. Seriously: this is endearing.