|Reviews for nyctophobia|
| dragonflydreamer 5/24/09 . chapter 1
Very interesting twist on nyctophobia. It seems to me like the "you" in the poem isn't already afraid of the dark, but the narrator is convincing them that they should be. And its so ambiguous, that the "you' could very easily be the reader.
I also like how you start with "and." It gives the feeling that it's continuing from something else, or maybe that it really has no start.
[your slow fade away.]
This stood out of my. I suppose it's becaue it would be more common to say "as you slowly fade away." I'm not quite sure whether I see that as a good thing or a bad thing, but I thought I'd point it out.
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| Ernest Bloom 10/24/08 . chapter 1
ah...do the dead fear the quick?
| evm 9/2/08 . chapter 1
"And someday there will come a point/ where you turn off the lights at night/ and discover that you cannot see your hands/ or hear the beating of your heart" This was my favorite part, especially the beating of the heart, because it's so surreal. I like the rhythm you created to, with the slow impact of the lines in the middle.
| windy girl 9/1/08 . chapter 1
I really like lines three to six. The rest of the poem was nice, but those really stand out (to me, anyway).
| no.peace.los.angeles 8/30/08 . chapter 1
Interesting. It's definitely a new approach to a common fear, and that alone makes it a good read. I like it. Keep writing! :)
| Ashelin 8/28/08 . chapter 1
What an interesting twist on nyctophobia. It seemed vague, but in a good way. As if you could have pinned it on any one person and it would fit. Ambiguous I suppose one would call it. I think I liked the first stanza best, simply because it's a backwards way of looking at the entire situation. Most people I think would believe this sort of fear is what is in the darkness, but having the darkness consume you, become you, is much more frightening. Good job.