aww, very nicely done. way to present such a real moment.

Sweet. Some of the language just needs a quick clean-up so it reads better, but the dialogue's nice and realistic. I like the ending-- well, the way I interpreted it:
“I know you, Lola, better than anybody else on the face of this stupid planet. If you even thought you had a chance with him, we wouldn’t be in this car right now. You’d be at his house studying, turning on all that charm I know you’re capable of.”

Abruptly, and fast enough that the tires squealed, Lola turned into one of those illegal U-turn spots on the freeway, and was onto the other side in a matter of seconds.

Just made me think of one of those go-and-get-him moments that we all sorta live for.

Ha! Good. I liked it. It was well written, and the dialogue was interesting, and mostly realistic.