Too bad you're not trying, cause I liked it! grr! Well, if you write more I'll read it. haha.

Oh side note: if you're going to drop the f-bomb you might want to change it to M rating.

The dialog in this is really great. Your characters really come to life with it! *keeps reading*

Chapter Two:

Mm. I believe that you could mesh chapter one and two to make it a longer first chapter. It would probably flow better that way..

"Todd shook his head." In some countries...shaking your head means yes.

""It always is," I sighed, patting his hand." Arden's patting Todd's hand as they're walking down the hallway? Unless she's holding his hand, this seems a bit weird.

Can you say awkward? "In the single most embarrassing moment of my life, my brother tore off my pants. "

Mm. I dunno. I still think you could make chapter one and two into one chapter. In fact, the way chapter two ended is a great way to end a chapter.

Chapter One:

"They say that butterflies can cause catastrophes. They flap their wings and disasters happen years later. I’ve heard it all—tornados, earthquakes, hail, and hurricanes. If one creature could cause so much destruction, even in a little way, why give it the chance? If there is a God, why give butterflies their wings?" I LOVE this. Great introduction.

"JD slammed the truck door from behind, then walked to my side, holding out a sweatshirt. It was hot outside, but I tend to get cold a lot. Instead of listening to me complain, he placed the sweatshirt around my shoulders, like a gentleman." You say that he was holding out the sweatshirt one moment, the next he's wrapping it around her shoulders. Either I imagined this wrong, or you had to different ideas at the same time. As I see it, he's holding it out for her to take, nothing otherwise... well, at least until he wraps it about her shoulders.
Whoa. When I read about JD, I thought that he was her boyfriend.

"Except, it smelled bad." This sounds really...random, I guess. Okay, so not really random, it just makes it seem a bit choppy, the way in which it flows from the last paragraph. Perhaps that's your intention, but it sounds weird. If you don't want it to be choppy, maybe you could make it into something different. Possibly something like: "The only thing was, it smelled bad." Good thing about this paragraph, the next lines flow very well. Good job.

"The gravel crunched beneath us as we walked to Todd’s front door. It was a narrow old house with a second story, and painted some pale color I couldn’t distinguish in the dark. I noticed there were no porch lights, just the dim, flickering light coming from the street." I find it interesting that the main character was able to distinguish (in detail) the colors of the butterfly, and the sole of her shoe and such in the dark, yet she's unable to make out the color of the house with the light on from the street. Granted, the butterfly is probably closer to the light. Either way, when I started reading this, I imagined that this story was starting in the day. Maybe try and throw in the darkness earlier on in the piece.

"And waited. And waited…" Tedious. You could get the same effect if you drop one of these.

Ahah. Love the way you ended the chapter, here. Not bad, not bad at all. But, I'm still trying to figure out the age range of this brother and sister.

Wow. This is amazing.
Seriously, I am already falling in lust with this story. Eager to hear who the narrator of this most recent chapter is. Are JD and Arden like . . . ghost hunters or something?

Update!

I love this whole mysterious feeling I am getting from this... like, how are they all connected. Okay, well, I kind of know that already, but I mean, how will they be connected in the future. This guy seems interesting anyway. I like having another POV about JD though... for some reason it makes me giggle that this guy doesn't like him at all.

Well, muy excellente, I must say. And congrats on the evacuation being over. We actually have sun here today, for the first time since whenever, so I'm pleased as well. And I'm not even anywhere near the coast!

awe. you thanked me first! :)
anyways, very good chapter.
update soon, you're a /very/ good writer, it amazes me.
and makes me somewhat jealous.
xD
but it's alright. :D good work!

DANG!

Who is this mysterious, cynical, slightly bitchy new narrator? Which reminds me...why do people drink black coffee? I LOVE coffee...with stuff in it. *shakes head* I'll never understand it. Perhaps only the very severe and the very old partake in that particular spite to the coffee gods. Hm.

Anyway, I still love JD. I usually go for the tall, dorky types. But short dorky types have their charm too. And I'm just going to blindly ignore what the narrator said about him being a bully. BANANA.

I'm glad you were not swept away by angry water, my dear. MUA!

Whoa.. did he just make a prophesy? Totally creepy. More than once I have had a dream that's come true, and it's the freakiest thing in the world. So any kind of future-seeing thing is really disturbing to me.

Spider bites are so nasty. Ugh. Well, this chapter was kind of short, so I will make my review short as well. There ya go.

WOW! Great chappy!

Impromptu sweatshirt skirts are the worst. Long story... :D

I loved the ending. And I hated it...it hurt so good! *Ahem* Stoners are so funny. Especially when they can tell the future and not remember it three seconds later.

Did I mention that J.D is adorable? I don't think you described him physically though. Maybe I missed that part...

Anyway, BE SAFE! I live in the desert...so we don't have many hurricanes out here. I hope everything works out alright. Send me a message or sumpin..ya know. If ya need something. MUA!

Beautiful! Amazing! Starchy!

I can't convey to you enough how much I adore J.D and Arden. The two most wonderful, dysfunctional siblings I have ever read about. I think I might be in love is J.D already, but I'm not sure yet.

Oh YEAH. Thanks for FREAKING me out about the Gustav thingy! I'm assuming you posted chapter three from here on earth...Please?

awe. :)
you're a very talented writer!
update soon. :D

Yes, get out of there now! Stupid hurricane.

This was a little bit creepy, but then it still had some humoristic moments that made me giggle. Like potato salad at the end and JD yelling out random things. And him pulling down her tight pants. OUCH!

And ghost spiders? Muy creepy. And gross. Is she dying now? What's going on?

Keep up the good work!

HOLY! CRAP! So I was all about to be like "hahahahaha!" in the review due to the awesome ending of this chapter, but then I realized that MY NAME is the very last word of this chapter! WTF? LOL! BBQ! So that makes the ending of the chapter, like, 10 times better.

You know, I used to hate reading stories that switched POV a lot, and then I wrote one that did it just to see what the big deal was all about. Turns out that I actually like it a lot. The biggest piece of advice that I can give is not to write the exact same scene twice from two different POVs. That's when it gets the most boring. The only exception is when one person is under the assumption of A and the other is under the assumption of B and they clash and it's funny to see what they are thinking and the contrast of that. But even then, it must be VERY GOOD. I made a terrible mistake with this at the beginning of Pie, and I have yet to correct it on FP.

Anyway, back to this story:

So this seems very interesting so far... some kind of scary thing hunters or something? Hmm.. maybe I should have paid more attention to the summary. Instead, I was just like, "Hmm.. Dellarose wrote a new story! Yay!" and clicked on it. But yeah, the ending was great! Her reflection!