Reviews for Dreams Of A Stranger

MidnightSeaNymph
2008-08-30
ch 1,

I chanced upon your story and I must say I liked it. Quick, to the point. Nicely written. Although, you made a few minor grammar mistakes:

"As you were biting in my neck marking me as yours, your hands had started to linger at the hem of my shirt." SHOULD HAVE A COMMA BETWEEN NECK AND MARKING

"Your whispers to me ears telling me not to stop as I reach the band of your jeans." SEVERAL WAYS TO SAY THIS BUT... WELL, just read it again.

Other than that (which really didn't detract enough from the story, at least to me, to be that big of a problem), I am going to go read your other story.

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