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| ohthevoices 2008-09-16 ch 1,   | This seemed to highlight how our government's not really accomplishing much to solve our nation's problems, by pointing out all the things President Batman could do. Which I'm not sure is what you intended, but that's what I got out of it. In any case...I'd vote for Batman. |
| Dead Is The New Alive 2008-09-08 ch 1, | I would vote for him. (No, wait. Can Joker be president?) |
| ilovetheopera 2008-08-30 ch 1, | Cute, though certainly an unworkable plan, realistically speaking. I agree with the previous reviewer that rhythm should be of greater importance, but not necessarily more important than rhyme; i would say they are of equal importance, even if rhythm makes a rhyming poem that much more catchy or memorable. |
| Sobriquet Queen 2008-08-30 ch 1, | After reviewing some less than fantastic emo poetry, you've certainly got my attention. And its even a real poem! This is a pretty big victory for me - I was just becoming disillusioned with this site as well as politics. :P Now, you've got rhyme - the rhyme is undeniably there, and while strained in places its generally sound. But you seem to have sacrificed rhythm entirely for rhyme, and I think (personal opinion, mind) that rhythm is more important. Just play with syllables and change words so that you get a rhythm when you read it back to yourself - a syllable or two make all the difference. You've amused me, whether it was your intention or not, and you've converted me. I'd vote for a President Batman! (nice tie-in at the end there, by the way...) |