I hope you know I'm wasting valube IT lesson time reading this!
Ha its not valuble I don't do anything in this lesson . . .
Very good, but well I'm a bit uneasy about it . . . -shudders- well written, but I prefer more dramatic endings =D
Hmm I should really do work . . .

He he
'the sneaky bitch'
LMAO! =D

Have fun writing! If you are reading this review before the end of november shame on you!

I think you have the right idea in experimenting with writing styles and formats to find one that suits your story, so please keep experimenting with that. I also like how you gave your main character an unusual background - it makes your story more unique. It would strengthen your story if you could give more information on the main character's background and the reservation, as this will determine the resources available to him. For example, you mention a lily being used as part of the spell, but the most common lilies are not native to North America and would not likely be used in a Native American ceremony. This is a minor detail, but it might affect the believability of your story for the reader. I like where your draft is going and how you've already developed interesting plot twists - this is just a minor suggestion for a future revision.

Ooh . . . interesting . . . yes very interesting . . .
aw your failing? I have no idea how I'm doing at school (but well I hope) then again I haven't started to feel the pressure so . . . =D
You'll do well I bet! (OH and I got a B- on my art homework cool huh?)
So yeah I like this story it's strange anywho byee =D

I think you did a good job with this. I would defiently like to see another chapter up. I'd really like to find out what happens xp (Yeah, I'm not good with dealing with suspense)

O-er very INTRIGUING (m'dear you can't spell) . . . and no I wasn't the one vote
(did you vote when Iz and I had the who do you prefer poll? (which I won)

Got me interested! I wonder why this Michael person did...I really like how much effort you put into your spells by naming a few ingredients that went in there unlike some stories about magic and they just leave that part out. I'm guessing the spell might make something bad happen to Michael because you put a Lily petal in there and they are the flower of death, but I think I'm the only one who realizes that.

I did find one mistake, though. Where it says "“That which was done unto me..." I'm guessing the "which" is supposed to be "witch." I'll be looking forward to more!