I must say I am rather confused. I thought he was the only one who hadn't received yet. Also, I think that Ness' reaction was a bit... extreme and unrealistic.
But I think you are a really good writer, don't get me wrong! >.<

(PS i hope you dont take any of my criticism the wrong way)

i'm kinda submitting these at 10:00 at night so i'm just skimming the first chapters but this looks like a solid peice of writing. I don't know why but i have a strange dislike of the name lars for absolutely no reason whatsoever. I'll read te rest later

This is pretty cool... please update!
I know I don't really do it either but I'd love it if the chapters where longer.