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| forever screaming 2008-09-30 ch 1,   | outstanding. this is such a good piece you can feel the emotion as you read the words. "I screamed and screamed and screamed for you" i like how in this line you said screamed 3 times it showed how anxious you were to find him and how you needed him and it worked with the rhythm and didn't throw it off at all. and i LOVED the ending. amazing! keep writing! |
| casi 2008-09-30 ch 1, | i'm quite happy you have written again... and this was an amazing piece that i liked VERY much, hope you continue writing |
| october lies 2008-09-03 ch 1, | this is so perfect, so well written, it makes my own heart ache. |
| Coneyisland-Girl 2008-09-03 ch 1, | hmm i like it even if you are rusty. It's very abstract and the syntax and rythem is perfect for this piece. the best poems come from the stongest and the truest emotions. congradulations on writing again. i hope you continue. |