|Reviews for Promises Broken|
| Scarlet Hyacinth 9/5/08 . chapter 1
The first time I read the beginning I was on the impression that Jer was actually sleeping on the table like he would on a bed. Of course, it might have been because I was reading it at 3 a.m. on wap but anyway... For now, it's a promising start. You know me, I love angst.
I must admit the second part of chapter 2 confused me a little, because at first I didn't understand what they were up to and I'm still a little confused as to how Jer rejected Der.
Also, why do you use ellipsis at the beginning of a phrase? Ellipsis used to be my problem as well, but I've been struggling out of it :D. Grammar mistake: deliriously in the first phrase of chapter 2 spelled wrong and lets see somewhere in ch 2 as well.
I'm looking forward for more though, maybe meet Simon, know the details of the break up. Will J hook up with D? Pls update soon. Nothing like some good angst to start the day :D.
Huggles for you, Scarlet