"to my souls demise"... soul's
"But it is too late you’re distant and falling"... I felt like maybe you could split this line into two

I like the piece, it's very bittersweet. I also like the ring finger thing, it's interesting.

:) thats just what I needed right now

This is not my best poem for sure...
but this is all I could write at the time ...

Anyway, let me know what you all think...