The opening imagery is so vivid, it sets the tone almost immediately, creating a setting and mood all in one sentence. "Tears only cloud your vision" can have so many leveled meanings, whether literal or metaphorical, but I still love it.
A little further downward, there's a quick stream of consciousness that doesn't really seem to fit: talking of sun chips, the sun, spicy food, and on. It seems out of place.
"Sarcasm dripped off my tongue"- another perfect phrase.
"How do u kill an angel?" U seems out of place as well. It was formal, and now a sudden shift to informal.
I can't help but notice that the quote "When Angels deserve to die" is from Chop Suey by System of a Down... is that where the inspiration was seeded from.
And the ending: does Devin die? Or is this just all in his head?


Overall, the story had a great theme, something of redemption, and an affirmation of hope during the worst. I liked it.

You have an interesting story and beginning; it automatically pulls the reader into the atmosphere. However, you should clean it up a little.

Some things I have noted:

"Things are staring to get out of hand". Staring= starting?

"I didn’t realize how awful it was. Dreadful things keep happening to the best people and soon, it’ll be too much." I don't recommend switching tenses in one paragraph. Keep it all in either past or present tense.

I like the metaphor:

"Every time I had a chance to think of something else, the thought of angels found a trap door."

Ahh, the ending. I found myself liking this story more and more as I went on. Your idea of an angel's death is actually a good one; and I liked how you slowly unfolded it into your story.

However, there are a lot of awkward sentences (eg. "I know better now, I only cry when angels deserve to die. Why else is anything important, they are the ones who looked over me through the years. Brining me joy, comfort was all they needed to do to feel alive." Sentences like these can be cleaned up. Watch out for where you change tenses. Watch out for your arrangements - the last bit can be smoothed into "Comfort, while bringing me joy, was all they needed to feel alive" - you know what I mean.

Sorry if I'm harsh, but you have a good story, now just edit. Good luck!

I like the way you wrote this story. I think the fact that you chose to write it in the first person was a good choice. Although, third person would've been just as good. What I don't like though is that you have a few spelling errors and that distracts from the overall story. Maybe spell check it before you submit next time so that little things like that don't take away from your story. But overall, good job.