The switch to present tense from past really works here. It's subtle enough that you only half notice when it's happening, but it definitely adds something.

You're right. It is sad. But in a very touching, heartbreaking way. I like the way you've kept it concise and the fluidity that comes from linking everything together through his age. I also like the fact that he's anonymous, in a sense, without a name, a location, or any of the details that superficially define a person. He could be anyone; someone you know, someone you love. And I think that makes it even more poignant.

At any rate, through all my rambling, what I meant to say is that I enjoyed this, and thank you for writing about something real.

In my frail state of 0 hours sleep, I sobbed my heart out to the computer screen. Literally. I had tingles everywhere.

That's just too sad. I wish I'd read your warning... Well, I mean, I did read it, I just didn't obey it...

ahaha. byee . bella.

This was unbelievable...in a good way. It was amazingly written. :)

OMG! Now YOU have got ME crying! And it's in a public computer lab! How humiliating! Oh well. I love this story! It so heartfelt and full of emotion! Well paced, and--it makes me cry! I love it! I love this story! You are brilliant!
~Ara

This was amazing! It brought tears (which ruined my makeup.) to my eyes. I love this. Good job.