I absolutely love this story so far. The descriptions of the storm and of your characters are wonderful. I love rain storms. The descriptions of action flow very well-- it's easy to picture the characters' movements.

I did notice some grammatical/spelling errors. Most of them are probably typos, but there are one or two things, such as misplace commas, that you might want to change:

"stair" should be "stare"
"pored" should be "poured"
"savor" I think you meant "savior"
"pulls" I think you meant "pools"
"..canal.Teetering.." should probably be "..canal, teetering.."
"..him, underneath.." should probably be "..him underneath.."
"..react, and as soon.." should probably be "..react. As soon.."
"should" I think you meant "shoulder"

Keep writing! I'll read more when you post!