for 40 days and
40 nights the train
never stopped and all
our umbrellas were
badly damaged, not to
mention the ark.

I really enjoy the way that you break the lines so that the narration of it in my head as I read breaks sharply and then picks back up again somehow smoothly when I look to the next line. Cool effect.

It is short and to the point.
Very beautifully written.

*Tiffy

using brightly to describe hurt works really well, as does separating "twitch/ing" and "some/where".

k.X