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| Kit 2008-09-29 ch 1,  | So sad, that would be awful to happen, I suppose that's one of the reasons that I can never have any children. |
| simpleplan13 2008-09-14 ch 1,  | I like this, really powerful piece, it almost made me cry. The story is heartbreaking and you describe their actions sweetly. The only thing is that the ending seems a bit unrealistic, eventually yea people reach that level of acceptance but usually after sadness comes anger. It just seemed a bit unrealistic. Still a really heartbreaking piece. PS If you're bored this weekend check out the Review Game's Review Marathon (link in my profile) |