Please, do come back, at some point. I've been waiting for this piece for a very long time. And it's...not quite what I'd imagined, but it still lived up to my expectations. Also, Wonderland reminds me a bit of the Overlook Hotel from the Shining. Don't think you meant for it, though. Anyway, I'm sad to see this go, but hey, if you love something, let it go, right? ;)

Oh, twins are just so ** fascinating! And I am so glad you're updating again. It's been too long. :)

Short, but very well written, as always. And it did take you a long time to update, missy! But no matter. I really am anxious to read the part about Wonderland itself, though. :)

I am so glad you're back. :) And you haven't lost your touch, either! In fact, I'd say you've gotten even better. The Caterpillar always fascinated me. And the Cat dominates everything, as usual. Lovely piece!

Good. I like the banter thing going on between the Caterpillar and the Cat. But... the story seemed to end on a differend note than it started, and I'm not quite sure how it got there. I think it was mostly just the last paragraph that didn't connect.

For clarification, I DID like the ending paragraph, it just didn't seem to quite fit with the rest of the piece.

I somehow don't remember the Duchess, but I lovelovelove this anyway. The update was kinda later, you know, and I'll take anything I can get. Still, this is beautiful. Wow. :)

You are getting better, yes. I never fully understood the Queen either, but I think you've done a pretty good characterization of her. It makes sense. But I don't know... I like the part about Wonderland and how it knows better than to whisper etc. And before I forget, you need to write a piece about Wonderland itself, I really wanna read that, especially since I read that sentence about how it "shrieks and howls about secrets far darker than..."
Anyway, I was sure I was going to have to wait much longer for you to update, not that I'm disappointed or anything. Thanks for updating. :)

gez, i just love this one. and i love your writing.
you've got the whole 'madness' thing just right.
again, i like the repetition and the stuff in the parenthesis. in a way, it reminds me of the way i think and my writings.
=]
you should continue

I love how you twist the words and expressions and lines and... Well. The last line is great. The thing about the Rabbit is supposed to be white and that there will be no life for him is brilliant, and that goes for having to think in black and white, never in grey.
I'm still reading, you haven't ruined anything. You've made it better, actually. :)
Update soon, please. (L)

*swoons* Oui. Keep going, keep going, I -need- you to keep going. I'm a cat, did I ever tell you that? Dammit, how do you do it? You need to update and update and never stop updating. I love it. So please?

I adore the contradictions. They're like... me xD I am completely in love with this.

Oh my god, this is so brilliant. You explain everything brilliant, I'll remember some of your lines forever and GAH, this is, this is... I love it. xD

i actually quite like the repetition. in all the chapters.

i'm favoring the last sentence of this part.
=]
i think you should keep writing, dear.

Hm... I wouldn't say I liked this piece quite as much as a WHOLE, but I REALLY liked a few key phrases, such as:

-Pure love exchanged for primal passion. The cat watches as the soldiers paint and paint and the paint comes off—why won’t it stay on?

-If you’re going to turn a rose red, it will have to be from the inside out.

- Because every time the cat opens his mouth he thinks he’d rather tell a lie. Or the truth. They are the same thing in the end.

-The cat answers, but—oh no, no the cat never lies. He hides his truths in plain sight and waits for his listener to wander away puzzled.


And although I sound really critical, I'm sorry. I'd really love it if you'd keep going! I really think you explain the essence of Alice in Wonderland through your stories... ugh, I sound like such a bore! Sorry. Do keep going, though!

Hmm... As you said, it seem like you didn't really know what you were trying to say. Still, rather poetic... I enjoyed all the different allusions (or is that the wrong word?) to Mercury.