Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search Login Register Extras
Reviews For: A Greater Purpose
Counting Petals 2008-09-13 . chapter 1
Review Marathon! (If you're confused, there's a link on my profile.)

I think that this has the potential to be interesting. At the moment, however, I wasn't very interested - this felt a little dry and I found my mind wandering a lot as a result.

There were also a lot of run-on sentences, which were a problem because they made everything run together.

Also, watch it's/its. You mixed them up.
Return to Top